Kia ora Jabal. Phil here from the intro video. Thanks for entering your poem. I like your choices of background and font colour, they go well with your theme of Christmas. You've managed to pack a lot of information into your three lines, ka pai! Have you tried doing a Screencastify of you reading your poem?
Chris here from the SLJ, again. Did you enjoy this task? I really like the creative approach you took with some of the language you used here, like “neath”, and “nips.” Ka pai! You’ve also used some impressive language features in your poem!
That first line has a simile in it. A simile is when you compare two things using “like” or “as.” You said “hearts glow like lit trees.” Pai mahi!
“Kissing neath mistletoe” has a verb, “kissing.” Verb means a ‘doing’ word, like an action.
Then “snow nips, love is warm” is juxtaposition: putting two things next to each other that are opposites. Snow “nips,” being cold, and “love” being “warm”.
This is really awesome stuff, I’m an English teacher and language features like this is something I’d be doing with 13-15 year olds!!
Have you written much poetry before? Do you like reading or writing in general?
Mālō e lelei Jabal. This Haiku made me feel warm andI agree with Phil about the font and colours making is standout. I don't know if you have made a recording of any of your poems. It would be cool to listen to you reading them as it might bring out a different interpretation (way of thinking about it). Dave from Manaiakalani
Kia ora Jabal. Phil here from the intro video. Thanks for entering your poem. I like your choices of background and font colour, they go well with your theme of Christmas. You've managed to pack a lot of information into your three lines, ka pai! Have you tried doing a Screencastify of you reading your poem?
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ReplyDeleteChris here from the SLJ, again. Did you enjoy this task? I really like the creative approach you took with some of the language you used here, like “neath”, and “nips.” Ka pai! You’ve also used some impressive language features in your poem!
That first line has a simile in it. A simile is when you compare two things using “like” or “as.” You said “hearts glow like lit trees.” Pai mahi!
“Kissing neath mistletoe” has a verb, “kissing.” Verb means a ‘doing’ word, like an action.
Then “snow nips, love is warm” is juxtaposition: putting two things next to each other that are opposites. Snow “nips,” being cold, and “love” being “warm”.
This is really awesome stuff, I’m an English teacher and language features like this is something I’d be doing with 13-15 year olds!!
Have you written much poetry before? Do you like reading or writing in general?
Can’t wait to see what you post next!
Ngā mihi,
Chris
Mālō e lelei Jabal. This Haiku made me feel warm andI agree with Phil about the font and colours making is standout. I don't know if you have made a recording of any of your poems. It would be cool to listen to you reading them as it might bring out a different interpretation (way of thinking about it). Dave from Manaiakalani
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